Monday 15 July 2013

Beans moment

Here is my beans moment in Waipukurau, I hope you like my Beans moment story of when I was about 7 years old. 

Beans Moment (Energy)
WALT choose words that describe a moment for the reader
YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS


  • begin in the action
  • present tense (I am, not I was)
  • short, sharp sentences
  • uses the senses (smell, taste, look, hear, touch)
  • strong verbs


On a wondrous and muddy Saturday I went to Waipukurau and our Coach said that we had to save our energy.

I was about 7 years old when this happened. We played about 7 teams and lost 3 games I think?

Some of the games were tough and 2 teams were little. We all had mud all over us after the first game.

Tyreese dived and had great tackles around the legs. We all had a great time and when we were facing this big team taller than us, I tackled 2 people and one of them were taller than me and the other was about 7 centimeters taller.

He cried for a little and had to toughen up.I got a sausage in a bread and it costed $1.50, it smelt really good and there sodas, cookie times.

We all went to face the kids that were bigger than all my team and even Rashaan.

He wanted to help us and he did, a tiny bit. Otane (which is our team) had to face them again!!!!

We lost against them 2 times and we also lost against the other team but at least we all tried our best and had fun.

I don’t really know all the teams names because that was in 21/9/11.
                                                                                                                             
When it was Otane's 5TH game we all jogged out onto the field, I always stayed behind in all the games and waited for Tyreese to kick the ball and we all chased it.

Tyreese, Ollie, Dylan, Gabriel, Rashaan, Grant, Zachary, Jonty And I really did some great teamwork.


1 comment:

  1. You write very well Tyrone, putting the reader right where the story is

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